All Alone

The past two weeks we have been writing two paragraphs about what we see in the photo below.
We had to use descriptive words to show not tell. Next time I will use more descriptive words.

Through the roaring thunder and the howling wind, the man stumbled on to the hard wooden floor. The man was horrified with fear, he didn't know if he was going to see his family again. He prayed and prayed that God help could help him. He could overhear rats scratching against the unfinished painted wooden wall, disgust was creeping through his body. The man was over exhausted, he could get an earful of himself breathing heavily but also he could get a handful of his own heartbeat thumping in his own mind in his ears. As birds flew in the sky from day to night the roaring thunder became a happy sun and the howling wind became a normal wind that would sprint through your hair. 

 As the sun gazed through the dirty windows and made a shadow of a human figure and the fresh wind creeped through the keyhole, the man thought it was time. The man struggled to find his home, but he didn’t want to give up. While the man struggled, he recognise a light blue house that looked familiar to him. The man walked in and he was surprised, the house was as silent as like you were in a exam room. The man was confused, the car was parked outside but no one was inside. Time flyed it was 3:30pm he had been waiting for 2 hours, so he thought he should head back to his cold cabin, as he was going to step outside he got the sound of water splashing in his ears. The man walked to the back door and there was his wife and kids in a warm pool, this brought him to tears. He opened the door and the wife looked at him and it bought her to tears too, the man hugged his family and they all had dinner as a family.